For your reading enjoyment today, I’m pleased to offer a short story I wrote a few weeks back. I scribbled Shattered Ice in a flurry of wintry inspiration and entered it in Family Fiction’s short story contest: The Story 2014. (And then, being still inspired by said flurry of frosty fantastical funness, decided to create a mock cover for it. *grins* I never did claim any skill in the graphics design department, but it’s the best I can do.)
So if you enjoy Shattered Ice, do me a favor and give it a thumbs-up vote. And feel free to share the story with friends, neighbors, random acquaintances, yes and even your supervillain enemies, if you feel so inclined!
Ren’s eyes stare up at me. Pale blue like the arctic sky, but lifeless as the ice beneath my feet. Dead. My gaze wanders to the silver-fletched arrow piercing his heart. The arrow meant for me.
Numbness creeps up my arms, and the sword falls from my fingers, cleaving a bloodstained gash in the snow. Gray frosts my vision. A crimson river mars the pure white surface of the earth. My blood mingling with his.
Soldiers cluster around me, ragged and bloodstained, raising triumphant cries over the corpses littering the frozen plain.
I cannot join in. It wasn’t supposed to end this way. A victor cheated of victory. Revenge robbed of its sweetness.
The earth seems to tilt and I fall. Cold seeps into my heart
Even in death, must he steal all?
Follow this link to read the rest of the story and … if you like … cast your vote in favor of Shattered Ice: A Short Story.
Oooo, what a sad, sad, sad story. But beautifully written as always! :)
I may have shed a tear or two while writing it … but thankfully there were no witnesses! ;)
Great job! I hope you do well in the contest. :)
Thanks for stopping by, Kate!
Ooh, how delightfully enigmatic! Best of luck with that contest!
Why thankee! :) "Delightfully enigmatic" I'll take that description any day!
Good story. However, I found myself wondering how they could have a conversation in the middle of the battle over the sound of fighting. You could have made it work more realistically by describing interruptions, breaking up sentences a bit, and lengthening that part a bit overall.
Having said that, identifying the one part I think could have used help, the rest was very good. It was a pleasure to read it.
That was so good Gillian! I loved it. Emma
Thanks, Emma! Glad you enjoyed it! :)
Really good, but really sad. :( I voted!
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Thanks! I appreciate it! :)